I'm looking for a story editor. I have a written blog post (about a 4 minute read only 1,300 words)) I need someone that is good at rewriting and structuring stories and telling it an a way that connects with the audience. I want it to flow and be creatively and intelligently written like something you would find in a book. The blog post is about a time that I got pick pocketed in Rome. Take a look a let me know if you can help.
To be clear this is a contest. Please rewrite one of the paragraphs in the document below showing me what you would do to fix it, send the document back to me, I will award the money to the winner.